Dear Doug Findlater,
My name is Kassidie Cornell. I am fourteen years old and currently attend Glenrosa Middle School. I have been swimming on the Westbank Liquid Lightning Swim Club for six years and counting. We train almost every day at Johnson Bentley Memorial Aquatic Centre. We were interested in what your thoughts were on building a new eight lane fifty metre pool in Westbank.
Johnson Bentley is over ten years old, and is needing yearly repairs which has been costing a large sum of money. The poor air quality in the pool makes training difficult because we will all have to take a second to rest and cough. The air circulation problem is due to the age of the pool. We also train in Kelowna at H2O because of the poor air quality. That is why we thought a 50 metre pool would be great for the swim team and for Westbank its self.
Kelowna recently got a new 50 metre pool. They now have three pools within 20 kilometres of each other. Why did they receive a new pool when we are in greater need of a new one. We have to drive into Kelowna five times a week just to train. The land that Johnson Bentley is on right now is big enough for an even bigger pool. They have the entire field below along with the skate park behind.
The new campaign to get everybody active is Act Now B.C. By getting a new pool this will promote healthy living. The pool could also include a gym, indoor track and maybe even multipurpose rooms for other activities to be held. Considering obesity is rising among kids and adults, this would be a perfect way to stop it before it gets any worse.
Liquid Lightning Swim Club was created by the manager of the pool, John Douglas. He created the team almost ten years ago and ever since the club has been doing great. Competitive swimming is huge across Canada, and with a 50 metre pool, we would be able to hold larger meets and attract more people from not only across B.C. but even across Canada.
The swim team is also willing to raise money for the pool. We thought that because we are over half the reason to build the pool, we should help fundraise. What if we were to set a fundraising goal and if we reach it, you agree to fund the project.
One last thing is that studies show that if kids join after school activities and groups, the chances of them dropping out of school and doing crimes is increasingly lower. Wouldn't you want to have less crime in Westbank? Think about it less crime, active people and more tourists coming to Westbank for swim meets.
Take your time to think about it.
Sincerely,
Kassidie Cornell
Good Letter Kassidie,
ReplyDeleteYou used all the writing traits very well. I liked your ideas and the letter was very convincing with lots of facts about why they should have a new pool. Your voice was very persuasive and the organization of your letter was very well done. I can't think of anything you need to improve on good job.